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Deleted User Banned                 Since: 05-08-06 Last post: None Last view: 6338 days |
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| Hi guys this is what I do when I am in a serious mode; I have a passion for writing, and I have tons of poetry on www.poetry.com. I want to introduce to you my story thus far; I've had some people give me advice when writing it, and they liked it pretty good, and I hope you will too...
Prologue Time; a precious element ordained from the heavens. Being priceless, yet very wasted. The lives of men are fallen into the eye of it, being unprepared, because of the vanities of their negligence. But it will be kind to those who take advantage of it, living every moment as though it was their last. The dark wizard named Dorvan long ago, cast the spell to curse everyone in living in a circle of time with no end, thus the past will be repeated as the future emerges into it. But the spell had no effect on Dorvan; he could benefit form the knowledge ahead of time; he could destroy the ones who sealed him away, and be free again. He knew every move of everyone’s intent before it happened. Red, was a young boy from a quaint village, this young one learned knowledge of the spell, and was born into the very second it was cast; he could see the near future, and all of the past with physical contact to objects or people; he touched Dorvan. His mind showed him the spell, and was able to use every advantage; Red destroyed the evil Dorvan, and the people never knew of the curse, they were naïve to it. Dorvan’s daughter Dorvia tried to end the life of this hero, but she failed, and was destroyed as well in later years. Dorvia’s son, Dorvian, was even more mightier than both of them together, and could not destroyed, at least not with the power Red had, but instead he found the power of the Tellak, and sealed Dorvian away forever in a darkness unknown to any man. Dorvian lives, but only in a prison trapped in blue light, a light to repel magic in the depths of Emerald. He is never to be found, but he cast one last spell before the prison was constructed. He made an encryption on the base of the prison structure, a form of the Zekonian tongue, to open his prison. Never will he be totally imprisoned, for his chances may be slim, but they are chances for his return. One may find him, and use his power. Who would be so foolish…? Shall I continue to Chapter 1?... |
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The Red Snifit Ropa        Since: 03-05-06 From: Here Last post: 6338 days Last view: 6337 days |
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| Nice start! I would like to hear chapter one, the story sounds interesting, almost like a book... | |||
Silvershield   580  Since: 11-19-05 From: Emerson, New Jersey Last post: 6349 days Last view: 6337 days |
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| Two suggestions.
First, more paragraphs. Simple enough. Second, don't fall into the trap of the typical, enormously cliche fantasy storyline, the convention which has some responsibility for the less than respected image much of mainstream fantasy has today. That is, the evil wizard of long ago casts a curse on a land/bloodline/magical sword, and a hero from that land/of that bloodline/wielding that sword must overthrow that evil wizard, that evil wizard's offspring, or a similarly evil king/monarch/ruler. With a novel twist, it can be done well, but I doubt your ability (or my ability, or the ability of any but the most imaginative of writers) to come up with a new way to do it. |
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