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| Acmlm's Board - I3 Archive - Modern Art - Mario: Deception (Sprite Comic) |
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Riku Sledge Brother Unpredictable. Watch your backs. Or not. Whichever. I want Metal Gear Solid 4 so badly.                    Since: 11-17-05 From: Tompkinsville Last post: 6300 days Last view: 6300 days |
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| I've recently got back into sprite comics, so be constructive about the comments.
So, without further delay, I present Super Mario Bros: Deception. 
Comment: Can you guess what happened? (edited by Riku on 05-29-06 05:19 PM) |
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Lord SkyLart Cukeman  Since: 11-18-05 Last post: 6349 days Last view: 6349 days |
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It looks nice just watch your laungage.  |
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Clockworkz Birdon Since: 11-18-05 Last post: 6300 days Last view: 6300 days |
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| Fuck the fucking language. I think it's decent, but I'm not great on sprite comic crits. I'll have to see more... | |||
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Riku Sledge Brother Unpredictable. Watch your backs. Or not. Whichever. I want Metal Gear Solid 4 so badly. Since: 11-17-05 From: Tompkinsville Last post: 6300 days Last view: 6300 days |
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Comment: THE RAISE! THE RAISE! (edited by Riku on 05-29-06 06:58 PM) (edited by Riku on 05-29-06 07:03 PM) |
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Lord SkyLart Cukeman Since: 11-18-05 Last post: 6349 days Last view: 6349 days |
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Looks nice keep up the good work.  |
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Peardian N-Z KvSG #193 is up!  Since: 11-17-05 From: Pearl Island Last post: 6302 days Last view: 6300 days |
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| I'm not a big fan of the language, but otherwise it's pretty good. The panels are a little off (by a pixel or so), though.
I like Hookbill.  |
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JDavis Nintendo Fanboy Local Mod Affected by 'The Golden Power' +  Since: 11-17-05 From: Ada, OK, USA Last post: 6314 days Last view: 6302 days |
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| Not bad, but it'd be better if you used wedge/arrow things coming from the speech bubbles instead of lines, and if you didn't actually touch the characters with them. | |||
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Riku Sledge Brother Unpredictable. Watch your backs. Or not. Whichever. I want Metal Gear Solid 4 so badly. Since: 11-17-05 From: Tompkinsville Last post: 6300 days Last view: 6300 days |
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Comment: What?  (edited by Riku on 05-29-06 11:09 PM) |
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Sukasa Birdo Not quite as active as before. Xkeeper supporter Xk > ||bass I IP Banned myself! Twice!  Since: 11-17-05 From: Somewhere over there Last post: 6301 days Last view: 6300 days |
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| Maybe make the triangles part of the box, and not just black triangles or lines... as in, white polygon with red outline, with the triangle being part of the polygon. | |||
Skreename Giant Red Paratroopa Since: 11-18-05 Last post: 6307 days Last view: 6300 days |
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| Okay, two things: First, the line "To my mistake" doesn't quite make sense to me, and second, the characters' tendency to stand IN the floor is a bit odd.
Otherwise, it doesn't look bad. It may help a bit to make the text markers for Hookbill a color other than black (they're hard to see), though. |
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JDavis Nintendo Fanboy Local Mod Affected by 'The Golden Power' + Since: 11-17-05 From: Ada, OK, USA Last post: 6314 days Last view: 6302 days |
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| Like THIS. It's not that hard to figure out. It's only how all comics have done speech bubbles since EVER (or at least since the invention of the speech bubble). | |||
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Riku Sledge Brother Unpredictable. Watch your backs. Or not. Whichever. I want Metal Gear Solid 4 so badly. Since: 11-17-05 From: Tompkinsville Last post: 6300 days Last view: 6300 days |
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I'm trying to follow your guys advice. 
Originally posted by Skreename He's nervous and spat out something to save his life. SMW2 sprites are kinda hard to make stable on SMAS and SMW. I tried to make it look as stable as possible.
Comment: I hope Meta-Knight can control his temper.(edited by Riku on 05-30-06 01:01 AM) (edited by Riku on 05-30-06 01:12 AM) |
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Lunar MM Simirror  Since: 11-23-05 From: I dunno. Someplace. Last post: 6303 days Last view: 6303 days |
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| At least you're not using the GBA Meta-Knight...
Anyway, you're text boxes are getting better, plus the jokes are getting more obvious. Nicely done. |
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