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Cymoro
Posts: 2124/2216 |
I'll be blunt. These suck. Stop making sprite comics. You're using MSPaint, you have unfunny dialogue, you're trying to set it up like a movie that's going frame by frame, which really, really fucking annoys me, and (in addition to the last mention) you're repeating already said comments.
This sucks. This is the most critical I can get of this. |
TapTap
Posts: 80/405 |
I'm not going there. My mario's worse by far. I can't even add shading. |
Snika
Posts: 734/916 |
Eh... Nice comics. Maybe you should considered using your artwork instead of sprites? It could still be about Mario and his crazy antics, just with your drawings. |
Chris
Posts: 782/922 |
This comic can be better. It doesn't look interesting so far though. None of it makes sense to me, and well...if you're trying to make someone laugh, it isn't happening.  A few suggestions though... Maybe suggestions will help.
Suggestions:
1. CREATION -- Most important thing. You could at least design your comic to make it look colorful and cool in your eyes and others. What you provided, however, is something I expect to see on a nes rom. 
2. IDEAS -- If you're planning on making people laugh, you have to at least come up with some ideas and jot them down on some paper. Rushing through with the comic just to get things done isn't going to really get you anywhere...
This is about all I can come up with so far... I expect to see that you've improved in the future. The comics you have so far aren't bad though. Just a few improvements just so that others can feel well entertained by them.  |
Bella
Posts: 2543/2962 |
Yeah, I liked the first one in some ways more than others. After, the script kind of went off into different subjects. |
Shyguy
Posts: 1693/1998 |
Check my comic! It's better by far! |
NSNick
Posts: 3684/3875 |
Neither particularly well done nor funny. For that matter, it doesn't even make sense. |
Peardian
Posts: 1421/1696 |
Some of the text boxes aren't pointing to anybody and some of the frames look like you copied them exactly (ex: first two frames of #3). Otherwise they're pretty good. |
TapTap
Posts: 79/405 |
It gets better.
Number 2!
#2-Hut!
Comment: I don't really like this one.
Number 3:
#3-I'm alive!
Number 4:
Cupcakes?
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Peardian
Posts: 1420/1696 |
The only thing I have to say is try to keep the text from touching the edge of the text box, especially when they're both the same color. Otherwise, it looks good. |
Shyguy
Posts: 1690/1998 |
So me up to #4 then!!!
Waddaya waiting for !? |
Setzer
Posts: 496/532 |
LMAO a mario sprite comic with no background and MSPaint textboxes? YOU"RE SO ORIGINAL IT HURTS |
TapTap
Posts: 78/405 |
It is 1993, the time of SMW, and Mario has beaten bowser the same way that he always did in SMB1. we now join mario in this moment of suspense...
#1-Toad?
Comment: Hello! Our princess is in another castle!
What will happen next? Dun Dun Dunnnnnn...
I have up to #4 done. |
