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Prier
Posts: 6652/8392 |
Originally posted by MarioMaster
This is probably a bad comic. NO FLAMES!...
That's akin to saying: 'You're all dumbasses...DON'T FLAME ME!!!' |
Cymoro
Posts: 1880/2216 |
you wnat to se min lol
i laend mi tricks from u |
Peardian
Posts: 1002/1696 |
It would be better if the panels were, you know, all one picture.
By the way, either Wart's taking a dump, or you just got a screenshot and put Wart over Mario. 
By the way, the PowerPoint is huge and is taking forever to load.
... 33 minutes remaining and rising.  |
Kyoufu Kawa
Posts: 1835/2481 |
Also, don't use BMP files on the Internet. There should be law against that. |
Thomas
Posts: 122/298 |
Frist Comic
1) You didn't plan ANYTHING out
2) The Dialoge Boxes are mess in the first frame
3) The second frame doesnt show who the dialoge goes to.
4) The first and second frame dont match each other
5) Toad sprite doesn't match the quality of the other sprites
6) If you do make a next one try getting a basic storyline in there.
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Second Comic
Powerpoint presentations are not animated comics....Gif Images are animated comics... |
Riku
Posts: 294/1239 |
My new 1st animated comic.
http://www.freewebs.com/supermario6464/Super%20Mario%20(%20reloaded%20).ppt |
Yoshi Dude
Posts: 2506/3271 |
The comic is just bad, and you clearly were lazy about it.
I mean look at Toad. You couldn't even take away the white block around it.
The text looks terrible. Ignoring the material, which I don't even get.. you don't need a border that thick. The border text should NOT clash with the actual words in any way. Why would you choose neon green lettering? There are other shades of green that are easier to read.
And you need to improve your typing skills and grammar. "Iknow" and "Luigi, You're brother".. no. Think about what you're going to say before you say it.
Something that isn't so bad.. in the first panel, you can't tell that you're supposed to read from right to left. If you made it so Wart's text was obviously above Luigi's, it'd be easier to follow.
The other two panels are even worse. If you're going to dedicate a whole panel to just words, it better look nice. The last panel doesn't make sense, did you forget to put borders or something? I have no idea what's going on.
I've told you enough to have you STOP with your "next 1", and completely start over. Spend more time on it this time to make it look decent, at least. |
Riku
Posts: 293/1239 |
This is probably a bad comic. NO FLAMES!
I'll post the next 1 when I get finished. |
