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Grey the Stampede
Posts: 1822/3770 |
.........You're writing a dark and serious story, and you have NEVER READ ANIMAL FARM?
If you need some information about the inner workings of society, corruption, war, and greed, read Animal Farm. It'll definitely point you in the right direction, and if you're an avid enough reader, you're probably gonna finish it in under an hour.
All of Orwell's works are excellent bits of insight into society, and anyone who wants to write a story based around a world we cannot normally imagine should look into them.
As for the plot, you need more of a hook. Taking place in a world where food talks is good, but it seems kind of hokey, you'd really have to have some kind of extreme plot device to have the food make sense. Brian Jacques features anthropomorphosized animals in all of his Redwall novels, and he does so to place emphasis on the redundancy of size in his tales (i.e. a mouse can have the courage to stand up and defeat a cat or a badger or another animal that is many times its size). Make the secret idea REALLY important, or at least incredibly subtle so that when people discover it, they'll go "ah....." and commend your insight. |
Dark Vampriel
Posts: 1052/1658 |
Wow I was surely rambling there at the last part of the post I did.  But what I kind of mean is after you get it published that you go back and wish you've done something different after re-reading it again. Except that it makes sense to what you've already done.
So when do you plan on having it published? Like in the next few years or so?
I'd like to add that I never read Animal Farm either. |
Nebetsu
Posts: 1166/1574 |
Originally posted by Tarale
Well, I'm just wondering if you'll find that people are distracted by the fact that it's food. Personally I do find it distracting.
Although Orwell did write Animal Farm, and that was deep and meaningful and involved animals....
There are three good reasons why there's food talking:
1. To show how completely different the world would have to be. Sort of like a metaphor.
2. To make people realise that there is more to the world than the walls that they have created around themselfs.
3. (It's a secret and has to do with the story)
Oh and I've never read Animal Farm. |
Tarale
Posts: 1523/2720 |
Well, I'm just wondering if you'll find that people are distracted by the fact that it's food. Personally I do find it distracting.
Although Orwell did write Animal Farm, and that was deep and meaningful and involved animals.... |
Nebetsu
Posts: 1165/1574 |
Dark Vampriel: Yes I do plan on getting it published, but I dont know what you mean by what you're talking about in the next part of your post.
Tarale: Anyone who wants to read it. It's a deep and serious story, but it's in a land where food talks. You decide. |
Tarale
Posts: 1517/2720 |
Just wondering, who is your target audience with this book?
 Cause I for one, don't get it. I'm guessing that makes me NOT the target audience though... |
Dark Vampriel
Posts: 1048/1658 |
I'm gonna take it that you do plan on getting this book published when you're done writing it? In the aspects of writing I can surely say that over time that you go back to look at previous work that you'll find somethings you do not like but it's too late to change if it fits with the story though. |
Nebetsu
Posts: 1163/1574 |
Originally posted by Dark Vampriel
That's an original idea I must say. I remember back when you posted a little bit of it for us to read. 
Yeah. It's changed quite a bit since then. |
Dark Vampriel
Posts: 1045/1658 |
That's an original idea I must say. I remember back when you posted a little bit of it for us to read. |
MathOnNapkins
Posts: 1546/2189 |
Originally posted by Nebetsu
Picture this... in a land where food talks.
It's called Muffin Avenger. What do you think?
Somehow, I.... should have seen this coming. Don't know what to say. |
Nebetsu
Posts: 1160/1574 |
This is a book I started a long time back, but have never really liked the initial plot of it. I am very happy with the concept I've made for the world in the book, but not happy with the original plot. I have made some updates to the plot. Decided to keep the old plot as something that happens all throughout the new plot. Anyways, here's the official preview of my book.
Picture a land. A place quite different from our own. A place without government. A place with an entirely different set of moral standards. A place where every town is without leaders and people have no set of rules. The strongest survive and the weak drown. There is no good. There is no evil. Evil is determined by the person who is experiancing the ounslaught of an opposing force. A young boy, who runs away from home, finds himself in the middle of a war. A self appointed leader is attempting to enforce government on a world where it isnt needed. He obtains followers and trains them as hardened soldiers, bent on forcing law and order on a world that is at peace with anarchy. The young boy finds his home town in ruins and sets out to destroy the person who he sees as the center of evil, when the boy doesnt even understand what evil is. On his journeys, the boy must fight monsterous beasts, inner torment, a changing world, and find the one who is causing the world to take on such a transformation. Picture this... in a land where food talks.
It's called Muffin Avenger. What do you think? |
