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Omi
Posted on 08-06-09 11:30 PM (rev. 2 of 08-06-09 11:32 PM) Link | Quote | ID: 112420


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I would really appreciate it if you people stopped using script format. It is not roleplaying, it's not telling a story in anyway, you're just reading line after line after line.

Example of not what to do:


Person 1 : Hello there, how are you?

Person 2 looked towards Person 1, smiling.

Person 2 : I'm doing well. What about you?


Example of what you should be doing:


"Get out of the way, quickly!" She screamed, but it was too late; the car hit him, knocking him 10 feet in the air, and landed on his neck, causing an instant, gruesome death.


While they aren't good examples, it should generally give you the idea of what is expected.

Also, try to do more than one line of dialogue. Thanks.

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Man! Script format is super lame. There's no emotion in it. There is a reason that it is used for SCRIPTS: It makes them easier to write while allowing all the emotion and subtleties to be played out by the actors and the director. In a sense, you don't need to have subtlety when writing a script because all the depth is being filled out by another party.

But... Here, there is no other party making your bad writing look good. You don't have actors, and you don't have comparable. Here, this is most comparable to writing a book, so you should be using prose format. Script is just not acceptable.

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Posted on 08-07-09 12:00 AM Link | Quote | ID: 112424

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As something of an addendum, in case is wasn't clear

Script format isn't banned, or anything, but it's rather frowned upon; it breaks flow.

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Posted on 08-07-09 12:02 AM Link | Quote | ID: 112425


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Well... what about a half script half prose style?..

It's hard to explain, but uh....

Dude: "Man this sucks."

He walked around the room, clearly displeasured by the way the builder built his house. Finally, he turned towards the wall, and bellowed out loudly.

"You... You... DOUBLE WALL!!"

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Posted on 08-07-09 12:03 AM Link | Quote | ID: 112426


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That's not even bit prose.

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Posted on 08-07-09 12:04 AM Link | Quote | ID: 112427


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Well, I'm not good at it.

That's why it doesn't look that way...

I've seen it done right before though, I just can't remember where.

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Posted on 08-07-09 12:07 AM Link | Quote | ID: 112429

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If you're already doing that, it would not even be that hard to just replace the Dude: "Man this sucks." with a "Man," said dude, "this sucks." or an Irritated, Dude responded "Man this sucks."

It has a mostly equivalent meaning, but allows for more subtlety as well as more evident dramatic pauses. It's just better writing.

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Posted on 08-07-09 12:14 AM Link | Quote | ID: 112431


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Well, I think script format is more casual, whereas prose isn't. Script format is easier to read in mass amounts, whereas reading large quantities of prose can get annoying sometimes.

Not to mention, it's easier to manage larger amounts of characters with script than it is with prose. (I often have quite a few characters going at a time)

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Posted on 08-07-09 12:22 AM Link | Quote | ID: 112434


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Something else I wish to bring up is bad use of italics with quotations. It makes it difficult to understand the posts. Look at Trap's posts for examples.

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Posted on 08-07-09 12:28 AM Link | Quote | ID: 112436

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Well, something else I wish to bring up is that everything NutheadBros has ever written is incredibly trashy and has terrible grammar and punctuation. He's been told this before but it's never really gotten better.

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Posted on 08-07-09 12:30 AM Link | Quote | ID: 112437


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Posted by Marzen
Something else I wish to bring up is bad use of italics with quotations. It makes it difficult to understand the posts. Look at Trap's posts for examples.


I like how Stark does it, actions italic, words aren't.

If I do transition to prose, I'll need to think of a way to do thoughts differently. Meizuki, being sealed inside Tyty/Teyla, communicates through thoughts. Which in script would look like...

Meizuki: ''Sup.'

Teyla: '...'

Other than that, most things will be easy to transition I guess.... but I still gotta get used to it. :/

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Posted on 08-07-09 12:34 AM Link | Quote | ID: 112438

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The way I've been expressing thoughts is the way I learned it a few years ago; In italics, surrounded by parentheses.

(This isn't right,) she thought. (How could he do something like this? It's barbaric.)

This admittedly doesn't really have any base in grammar, but everyone can tell what's happening.

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Posted on 08-07-09 12:39 AM Link | Quote | ID: 112439


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I do italics in quotations for thoughts. But I specify that my characters are thinking. When you don't, it becomes a jumbled mess.

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Posted on 08-07-09 12:42 AM (rev. 2 of 08-07-09 12:57 AM) Link | Quote | ID: 112441


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Posted by Marzen
Something else I wish to bring up is bad use of italics with quotations. It makes it difficult to understand the posts. Look at Trap's posts for examples.


I do that to make thinking and simply doing something look different. I can, however, try to use parentheses for thoughts instead. And if I use telepathy I'll type it out in italics and then write the "talk" part with non-formatted text. Like this.

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Posted on 08-07-09 02:25 AM Link | Quote | ID: 112463


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I use unformatted text for action, italic inside single quotes for thought, bold/italic with no quotes for emphasis (Non italic if within text that is already italic), and parenthesis as my OoC delimiter. That's how I taught myself prose for role play.

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