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luigi Paragoomba                 Since: 02-12-07 From: Canada Last post: 6275 days Last view: 6275 days |
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| ~part 1~
One day at the Mushroom Kingdom there was a robbery! so princess peach called the guards and sent them out to get the thief! The guards went to Mario's house and brang him back to the castle. The princess told him about the theft and also told him that he was the one who did it! The kingdom's precious life mushroom was stolen and so Mario was accused of stealing the life mushroom and was sent to the dungeon. The guard that was watching Mario was called away by the princess and with no one watching Mario decided to break out! Mario sneaked out of the castle without being caught and headed down a pipe. He didn't know where it went but it didn't matter to him at that time. As Mario came up from the pipe he noticed he was in a tunnel so he armed himself with a rocket launcher. As Mario walked down the long tunnel he saw that it was being patroled by guards! The guards spotted him and tried to take him away, but Mario blasted them with his rocket launcher. Back at the Mushroom Kingdom the princess had called Luigi in and told him about the robbery and about Mario being accused for it! Luigi wanted to see some proof that Mario did it so the princess took him to the evidence room. Back at the tunnels Mario had shot his way through more that 50 guards and then finally finding another pipe! Mario was finally free but he still couldn't help but worry about Luigi. At the kingdom Luigi was shown the evidence and he noticed that it wasn't anything that Mario had ever had! Luigi immediatly thought that it was one of Bowser's no good plans to get rid of Mario! The princess was convinced that Mario was innocent now, but no one knew where he was! So the princess sent Luigi to find Mario and bring him back. So as Luigi went in search of Mario he noticed a trail of footsteps that lead to a pipe! Luigi followed these footsteps and then noticed all these guards on the ground. Luigi knew that Mario must have came this way to escape so he ran down the long tunnel in a hurry. He finally found another pipe and went down it! When he came up he noticed he was conered by someone with a rocket launcher! The person lowered the weapon realising that it was Luigi!, and Luigi noticing that it was Mario holding the rocket launcher. Luigi told Mario that he was innocent and that they know who the real thief is! Mario asked who it was, and Luigi told him that it was Bowser. Immediatly Mario agreed to come with Luigi to get vengance on Bowser for framing him! So Mario and Luigi went back to the castle to tell the princess that they were going to go after Bowser. The princess knew what they must do and let them go to him. Mario and Luigi sought out Bowser's castle to seek their vengance. Finally finding it they entered the castle. As they entered the castle they noticed that they were already standing in front of the Bowser's door, so they went in! As Mario and Luigi went in they called out to Bowser to show himself. Bowser didn't reply, and without any notice Bowser had shot a rocket at them to kill them both! Luigi jumped in front of Mario to protect him and took the blast from the rocket. Luigi had fallen, and Mario angry as every pulled out his rocket laucher and fired rapidly at Bowser sending him to his grave. Mario to sad at the time left with his dead brother forgetting about the stolen life mushroom. Mario went back to the kingdom and told the princess what had happened. The princess was shocked to see Luigi dead in Mario's hand and asked Mario if he had found the life mushroom to revive Luigi! Mario started to cry knowing that without that life mushroom his brother would never come back. So the princess asked Mario if they should bury him. Mario agreed. After Luigi had been buried his tombstone said (Friend, Hero, and a wonderful Brother). Mario had thought that it was all his fault that it happened and decided to tell the princess that he shall go seek out the life mushroom to bring Luigi back! The princess didn't like the idea of Mario risking his life, but she knew that not letting Mario go would just make things worse. THE END Hope you enjoyed it! There is 3 parts to this story, so tell me if you want me to post it and i will get around to it ok. Thanks for reading! |
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Schweiz oder etwas [12:55] (Dr_Death16); I swear, the word drama needs to be stricken from the dictionary, for I've heard it so many times, it will permanently be imprinted on my brain      Since: 11-17-05 From: Kingston, Rhode Island Last post: 6275 days Last view: 6275 days |
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| God dammit we have a writing forum for a fucking reason. | |||
Rom Manic Since: 12-18-05 From: Detroit, WHAT?! Last post: 6275 days Last view: 6275 days |
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| Good story, needs paragraphs. | |||
Higsby Shyguy  Since: 02-01-07 From: Canada Last post: 6275 days Last view: 6275 days |
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| I really like it. It could of used paragraphs but it's good enough that I'll look over that this time. It would be interesting to see what part 2 and 3 would be like.
(edited by Higsby on 02-12-07 05:17 PM) |
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luigi Paragoomba Since: 02-12-07 From: Canada Last post: 6275 days Last view: 6275 days |
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| ya...sorry i was really in a rush to write it! for my next parts i shall remember to write it in paragraphs!....some people like it so far! i hope more of you get to read this and make sure you read the others once i post them to! (edited by luigi on 02-12-07 08:03 PM) |
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optomon Rat Since: 02-12-06 From: California Last post: 6279 days Last view: 6278 days |
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I'm laughing so hard at this right now. |
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luigi Paragoomba Since: 02-12-07 From: Canada Last post: 6275 days Last view: 6275 days |
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| ON SATURDAY I SHALL POST PART 2 RIGHT HERE!!!! SO BE PREPARED!!! FOR SOME MORE FUN AND EXCITMENT AS YOU ENTER THE ADVENTURE OF MARIO'S DECISION PART 2! | |||
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Higsby Shyguy Since: 02-01-07 From: Canada Last post: 6275 days Last view: 6275 days |
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| Remember in the future to never type in all caps. It makes it very annoying to read your post.
Anyway back on topic, I'll make sure to read it when it comes out because your first one kept me interested. (edited by Higsby on 02-15-07 03:04 PM) |
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luigi Paragoomba Since: 02-12-07 From: Canada Last post: 6275 days Last view: 6275 days |
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| ok now heres the second part of Mario's Decision!
~part 2~ So from the last part we known that Luigi had been killed by Bowser and Mario was sent out to go seek the life mushroom to bring back his brother. So as Mario left the castle the princess stopped him to give him a mushroom just to be safe so that if anything had happen to him. As Mario went of on his adveneture for the life mushroom he found a pipe that he had never seen before, so he went down it. As Mario came up from the other pipe he saw shadows of what appered to be goomba's and koopa's. The shadows charged at him with brute force! Quickly Mario decided to jump over them and try to escape. As Mario ran down the dark path he crashed into something, and as he looked up he found out it was another pipe. As mario came up from the pipe he sealed to top with a rock. So now Mario is wandering down another path which he has no clue where it is leading to! As he walks down the path he notices a sign at a big door. The sign reads "All competetors are well come try to win against the 4 big boss. If you succeed your prize shall be a life mushroom kept in captivity for years. Many have tried, none have prevailed! If your not ready for this turn back now." Mario quickly decided that he must win these battles to get that life mushroom, so Mario enter through the big door and found himself standing infront of a huge Goomba. The Goomba spoke that he was not his first challenger, and that he will just tell him the bosses that he shall face. Mario listened to what the Goomba had to say and then he walked forward passed the first door to meet the first boss. When Mario walked into the room he noticed there was another gigantic Goomba, but this one was his first boss that he must defeat. The Goomba told him that it was most likely impossible to pass all 4 of the bosses. Then the Goomba told him that the fight shall begin now. Mario instantly tried to jump stomp on the Goomba's head, but the Goomba was to fast a quickly dodged. The Goomba charged at Mario at a fast and powerful pace! Mario had tried to dodge, but the size of the Goomba was too great to dodge, and Mario had been sent flying and then crashed into the wall. The Goomba quickly thought that it was over and left Mario there and turned around and tried to leave. Mario seemed to been down for the count, but then he remember the mushroom he had. Mario quickly ate it and with the mushroom's power flowing through him he quickly got up and made one giant leap to the Goomba and landed directly on his head! Not knowing the Goomba fell down with the great force of the stomp. The Goomba had never seen someone able to pass the first boss before, but then he knew that something was driving him forward to win the prize. Mario went on to the second boss which was a Pokey. Mario didn't waste time now and quickly jumped on the Pokey's head and took it off. Then Mario jumped back down with the head and threw it at the Pokey's body. The Pokey realizing his defeat he quickly opened the door to the third boss! The third boss was a gigantic red Bomb-omb. The Bomb-omb wasn't lit yet, so Mario decided to light things up a bit. Mario quickly jumped on the Bomb-omb causing the fuse to be lit. By doing so Mario had to try and avoid the blast from the Bomb-omb or it would all be over! The Bomb-omb was chasing Mario around the arena. Just before the fuse was finished Mario went throught the Bomb-ombs legs and dove as far away as possible. The Bomb-omb fuse had reached the bottom and then the Bomb-omb had blown up. Mario had finally made it to the final boss. Entering the room he saw the gigantic Goomba that was at the front door. The Goomba told him that he Mario had proven himself worthy of the life mushroom, but he also told him that Mario must defeat him before claiming it. Mario had gotten tired from all the other battles. As Mario looked around the room he noticed a [?] box up in the air, but it was to high to reach. Mario only had one chance to get it so he attempted to get it right. Mario waited until the Goomba was close enough and then he jumped on its head and rocketed upward to the [?] box. Mario hit the box and a flower had popped out of the [?] box! Mario grabbed onto it and became Fire Mario. As Mario landed he made a ball of fire, but he kept a hold of it until it got as big as the Goomba, and with one fatal throw he tossed it at the Goomba frying him to a crisp. The Goomba knowing that he was defeated unlocked the life mushroom and handed it to Mario. As Mario took the life mushroom a pipe appeared beside him, and the Goomba told him that it would take Mario home. Mario quickly went down the pipe and travel to the Mushroom Kingdom in a hurry. The princess was waiting at the castle for Mario's return and as she got up from her throne Mario had bargged through the front door and ran right to the back of the castle were Luigi was kept. Quickly opening his coffin Mario held his brother and feed him the life mushroom. If Luigi doesn't come back to life by the next 10 minutes Mario has failed to get the life mushroom to his brother fast enough. As Luigi was feed the life mushroom Mario and the princess waited and waited, but Luigi didn't come back to life yet. And so now you shall all have to wait till i write part 3 to find out what happens to Luigi. Hope you enjoyed it. (edited by luigi on 02-17-07 04:27 PM) (edited by luigi on 02-17-07 06:13 PM) |
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PCD Octorok Since: 01-27-07 From: Krypton Frank Last post: 6276 days Last view: 6275 days |
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| I can't even read this. It's too painful. I'm sorry, Luigi, but... ow.
There are plenty of issues with this, but the thing that's really and truly bothering me: Almost everything ends in an exclamation point. Shift + 1 =/= exciting, surprising event. I can't even focus on the story past that. Not trying to be a bitch. Just another writer letting you know. |
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Higsby Shyguy Since: 02-01-07 From: Canada Last post: 6275 days Last view: 6275 days |
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| I liked your first one so I read this one and I liked it (not so much the format but the story part). You put it in paragraphs this time (sort of) so at least that is good. If you decide to post the next part just make sure the punctuation is better and it will be amazing. So if you plan on posting part 3 I'll read it.
P.S. It's not to late to edit your post and fix the punctuation. |
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luigi Paragoomba Since: 02-12-07 From: Canada Last post: 6275 days Last view: 6275 days |
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| imma see on when i will be able to get around to posting part 3...cause im pretty busy during the week. |
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