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| Simon Belmont Posts: 653/1773 |
the first thing that bothered me had nothing to do with the artwork at all; it's the fact that you spent 37 minutes on it; I would suggest longer, erasing lines and redrawing them, shading them in and getting a feel for depth, and so on.
It looks as if her left arm is backwards, otherwise I have no idea how she cold hold a helmet like that. perspective issue: The front of her chest seems tilted towards the viewer, while her upper back [same horizontal area] seems pointed away from the viewer. other than what I mentioned, it's kinda nice, apart from the lines being formless. |
| Tarale Posts: 1465/2713 |
Originally posted by Water BioOriginally posted by Tarale Not quite. I can only see one breast, not two clearly defined in both of those. While there MAY be a slight shadow of a second breast in the second one, it's given nowhere near the definition or prominence that it is in Clockworkz' drawing. My critique stands that it's an awkward -- but possible -- position to have TWO buttcheeks and TWO breasts clearly defined. Trying to do so I've noted causes me to drop the shoulder on the side I'm twisting to down dramatically, but overall results in mid-upper back discomfort. If I don't drop down the shoulder, I have pain across my shoulder and neck.  |
| C:/xkas bio.asm Posts: 1123/1209 |
Originally posted by Tarale she's twisted the same way in official art, just look at those: Metroid Zero mission SSBB |
| MisterJones Posts: 88/125 |
Originally posted by Clockworkz Samus Aran fanart is always cool. As for t3h criticism: I'm really not convied with the posse, it looks...how do you say, stiff? I mean that her posse is more mannequin like than natural movement. I don't like her hair, if only because it looks more like Cthulu's mouth than hair. Try adding more sparse individual hairs, and making it look less tentacle-ish. Make it flow with nature 
The helmet looks more like a disc or shield, perhaps a change in the angle would correct that. While I am not fond of the style of her eyes, I must say they convey perfectly that resenment look on her. Good work on the proportions, the head might need a little touchups, but it look good the way it is (in terms or porportions, that is). She should be wearing her blue suit, she rcoks on it, she not be sex icon >  .
Overall, good work ;F |
| Tarale Posts: 1464/2713 |
Ah... it's a helmet. I get it now. I couldn't tell what it was; I thought it was some kind of flat disc or something (again, I haven't played Metroid). That explains it... if it were a disc it would be backwards; but given the shape that's ok then  |
| Clockworkz Posts: 772/984 |
No... She's holding her helmet (inside facing viewer). The hand isn't backwards. ¬¬
Trust me; I used my own left hand as the pose model, as well as a few mirrors and such to get it right. Thanks for the positive feedback. EDIT: I just drew a lottle sketch of the hand which I will upload within 2 minutes. Hang on... EDIT: here it is |
| Tarale Posts: 1460/2713 |
Something about the way she's twisted doesn't seem quite right. I dunno, maybe just a little TOO twisty... I'm not sure I could stand in a pose comfortably where one could see both my butt-cheeks and both my titties.  It's possible; just awkward.
Other than that, you've done well. I like the expression in particular, and the attention to detail. It's clear you've put a lot of time into this piece. Another thing.. the hand holding the... uh.. thing? (I dunno, never played Metroid) is backward. You would see the back of her hand and her fingers instead of her thumb from that angle. |
| Trapster Posts: 3244/3604 |
Woah, nice outfit. 
But something with the face or head overall makes me shiver if I look at it long enough. It´s well done, though. I think I´m gonna dedicate a folder on my computer for your drawings. |
| Danielle Posts: 5313/6737 |
Something with the hair throws me off... I can't really put my finger on it. If that's just your style, then not much you can do about it.
Other than that, awesome. Pretty talented. |
| Clockworkz Posts: 771/984 |
....File size is 250k. It can't take THAT long to view Even on 56k  |
| Kyoufu Kawa Posts: 979/1353 |
I'd love to comment, but I'm on 56k.
Got about a week patience? |
| Clockworkz Posts: 770/984 |
Disregarding my previous thread...
37 minutes, thereabouts, with a broken right hand and only one facial reference. And a body pose reference Regardless, I love it.
C&C Please. ...Please? |
